Bill Donnell

is I will be posting some of my stories at the instance of my sister. Her qualifications as a literary critic are questionable.

And, has not yet said what he/she is currently reading. Why don't you ask?

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Bill's short stories

The Cold Spot- a ghost storyBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
A ghost's revenge for his murder
The Soul- (revised)Bill DonnellThe Back Cover:
After a lot of problems with this story, I have settled on the revised version that was published here before.
Escape from CowpatchBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
A time when a twelve year old Boy lived with an abusive family In Cowpatch Oklahoma. Can there be any humor in that? Maybe
It Was a Dark Stormy NightBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
Because of an armature writer's opening words, "It was a dark stormy night", a murder was committed.
GeorgeneBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
Can two people find true love in the midst of the Amazon Jungle?
Dr. Livingston I Presume?Bill DonnellThe Back Cover:
Was the sacrifice worth saving the reputation of the famous Dr. Livingstone?
The Impossible PaintingBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
What is reality? Is it possible to paint an impossible portrait? Was the artist, Oldorf, successful?
Ask For IDBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
The problems with my Visa card in Bangkok. Store manager thinks my name is "Ask for ID"- Story very short
Memories of a Better TimeBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
This is a true account about a time and place where I once lived, a good friend, the pets that I loved. and the adventures we shared. Nothing is forever. It is now gone but the memories remain.
The Lone WranglerBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
A man's attempt to emulate The Lone Ranger and become a cowboy hero
The ToileyUpBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
"You left the toilet seat up! How many times have I told you to put it down when you're finished?" This is a major source of conflict in many marriages. This is the story of my attempt to rectify this problem.
Ghosts and Spirits of ThailandBill DonnellThe Back Cover:
As an American who recently chose to live in Thailand, this is my attempt to immerse myself into the Thai culture and my endeavor to protect my home from evil spirits and ghosts that abound in this country.

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22/04/2012jugularnotch
Many thanks for your comment on 'The Wretched Ones', sir! I have responded within the story itself.
19/04/2012jugularnotch
I'm totes following you, Bill!
15/09/2011march.postings
I tried fixing typos in comment but they don't give you an option. Omit do in the second last sentence.
I have posted this here and not on my wall, simply because I believe in making amends. And honestly Biblio does not notify on emails anymore. I just chanced to come here today. Best of luck to all you guys.
15/09/2011march.postings
Hi, I didn't realize there was something brewing here. I don't come here too often. Was I harsh to somebody, here? I just have one thing to say and that is I am honest. It's bloody harsh world out there and short story has no market. Editors have a stash of submissions they don't even look at. And really we do more harm than good by misleading people into believing that their work has merit. But this does not mean that the very author cannot do write better. My apologies to whoever I have hurt.
25/07/2011Marmalade Queen
I think March.Post's critique was harsh, and also not very coherent. It strayed from critiquing the story to critiquing the author, which is I guess what you were picking up on. But the story she was critiquing was truly awful. It's hard to know with stuff that bad whether to try to say something useful about why it's so bad, or whether to just say nothing. I've added my own comments which you may find as harsh as March.Post's.
25/07/2011Marmalade Queen
I've only just picked up your comment about March.Post. I guess she was pretty over the top in her comments, and yet there is so much utter rubbish published here, it can be hard to always think of constructive things to say. I don't think your comments to her were overly harsh. But I often find myself thinking that many people here would be better off giving up writing! She is right that the short story is a difficult genre.
24/07/2011PaulY
Hi Bill, Thanks for you positive response on the comment. I don't see myself as a poet but I just write for fun and feelings for the moment. I am not too bothered about rudemental requirement on poetry, but I like now and again put a story and feeling into verse. Thanks again.
24/07/2011PaulY
Hi Bill, Thanks for you positive response on the comment. I don't see myself as a poet but I just write for fun and feelings for the moment. I am not too bothered about rudemental requirement on poetry, but I like now and again put a story and feeling into verse. Thanks again.
23/07/2011Marmalade Queen
It's very frustrating that one has to delete stories and republish them - there is meant to be a way of amending them but it doesn't seem to work. Do you think that you and I are the only two people actively using this site??? I wonder whether there are livlier short story forums elsewhere. I find that I learn a huge amount from reading other people's work and trying to work out why some things work and other things don't. I am modifying "Insider Job" following your comments.
23/07/2011Marmalade Queen
I was amused by your title "It's a dark and stormy night". My father always used to tell this story...."It was a dark and stormy night and we were all sat around the camp fire. Tell us a story, they said. So I began, "It was a dark a stormy nigh and we were all sat around the camp fire...". We used to think it was very funny when we were small children. I agree the 13yo has great fluency and imagery, but her grammar is atrocious and make her stuff hard to read.
22/07/2011Marmalade Queen
I find endings the hardest things with short stories. With novels you have more leeway, but with a short story you've got to have some plausible but surprising plot twist. If only I could develop the knack! I think with Georgene what we don't have is anything about her past, except for her having been in prison. Maybe if you develop (in your own mind) more of her biography then a plot twist will emerge.
22/07/2011Marmalade Queen
Thanks for your feedback on the revised ending of "Just the Ticket."
I don't find the site especially slow, It has indeed changed. I prefer the way that you can scroll down down stories, rather than turn pages, but several features of the old site seem to have disappeared.
21/07/2011Jeyssika
Hey thanks for reading; I usually try to be as original as I can & I think just summing it down to a basic plot kind of ignores the emotions and feelings of the characters which is what a lot of my writing focuses around.
Either way what I have posted on this site kind of varies from genre to genre so there might be something there you like.
Thanks again x
21/07/2011PaulY
Bill, I appreciate you constructive comment on "Dragon Dream" and I will reevaluate the points in the story based on your suggestion. Overall, I thank you for your positive view based on the content of the story.
20/07/2011Marmalade Queen
Thanks for commenting on "Just the Ticket". I think you're right about the ending. I'll change it to her cashing in the ticket. There would be something Faustian about it. We already know that it wouldn't exactly give her a happy ending. I like to leave the reader with scope to ponder what happens next...think of the great ending in the film "The Italian Job". I'm frsutrated that amending a story doesn't seem to work on Bibliofaction. I'll have to republish.
18/07/2011PaulY
Hey Mr. Bill, thanks for your kind comments. Yes I did saw some syntax errors after I published it so I decided not to update since I would lose -20 points. I might do a revision on it later. Thanks for being nice, I know it needs some more work. :)
17/07/2011Marmalade Queen
Ah... the joint account would explain why things were easier for you. My son went of on a gap year to Chile and while he was away the bank correctly picked up an attempt at fraud on his account and blocked the card. The problem then was that the bank wouldn't talk to me, and wouldn't send a replacement card to Chile - not even to the British embassy in Santiago. He ended up travelling throughout Chile and Argentina with tenuous financial arrangements. Still, he survived and so did I.
14/07/2011Marmalade Queen
Hi Bill and welcome to Bibliofaction. I myself only joined a couple of weeks ago. I'm finding that,sadly, most stories don't get commented on at all, so I'm making a real effort myself to comment of others' stories in the hope that they will ocmment on mine. This is a well put togetther site. Between us all I am sure that we can breath life into it. I look forward to reading your stories.
13/07/2011finkland
I will post a couple more short stories in the next few days.

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Fullname: Bill Donnell
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About Me: I am an American living in Thailand. Finally got over the culture shock. I have been writing for my own amusement. This is the first time the stories I post will be seen by anyone other than me.

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Author: Edgar Allen Poe
Poem: The Raven
Quote: We all agree that your theory is crazy, but is it crazy enough? -Niels Bohr
Closing Line: The End
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Book Title: Treasure Island
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Film: Young Frankenstein
TV Channel: National Geographic
TV Programme: Nova
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